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 Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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PostSubject: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Sat Sep 13, 2008 9:07 am

It was a grey drizzly day. Not only was the weather grey, in the town all the buildings were grey and foreboding. The park was bare except for a fountain adorned with horrible gargoyles.
But the building our story starts in is a boarding school. It was an old gaol and the cells had been converted into depressing dormitories. The school was surrounded by high concrete walls. It was lunchtime and the students were standing were standing around the dreary quadrangle in their grey uniforms. One boy was standing near the wall. The boy’s name was Daniel. Daniel jumped when he heard a voice behind him.
“There is a whole other world out there you know.” The voice belonged to Lila. Daniel had known Lila for as long as he could remember.
“Come with me,” she said. “Come on. Let’s cross the wall.” There was a glint in her eyes.
“But nobody crosses the wall.” Argued Daniel. Before he could continue, Lila cut across him. She held out a hand.
“Take my hand.” She said. Slowly, tentatively, Daniel reached out his hand.
Suddenly a cascade of images flashed into existence. He saw mountains, deserts, seas, forests, islands, valleys, fjords, glaciers, ice fields, coasts and monoliths. Each of them was more spectacular than his wildest dreams. He saw swamps, bushlands, rainforests, reefs, plateaux, gullies, hills, rivers and isthmuses. And the colours! Greens, oranges, blues, brown! Colours he’d never even imagined. It was like being dragged through the pages of a natural wonders of the world book.
“I’ll show you my favourite spot.” Came Lila’s voice seemingly out of nowhere. They were now standing on a hill in front of a river that obviously needed a good shower. Trees grew near the bank. It was sunset and Daniel’s and Lila’s shadows were elongated. Huge black storm clouds rumbled their way along towards them. They sat on the dry grass to admire the scenery. Daniel turned to look at Lila, her head turned away, long blonde hair gently blowing in the breeze. She turned around and their eyes caught one another’s gaze. When their lips met, it was an explosion. Years of pain, sorrow and loneliness escaped in a passionate kiss.
When Daniel opened his eyes, he was back behind the grey concrete wall, alone.
“I’m going back.” He said, loud enough so only he could hear. He looked up at the clouds to see they were beginning to clear and a lonely ray of sunlight shone through. And he was going back to those beautiful lands, because now he knew what was out there, and he wouldn’t miss it for the world.


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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Fri Sep 19, 2008 2:27 pm

Wow. Does everyone hate it?
*sob*
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Tue Oct 14, 2008 8:33 pm

why was it deleted?
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Wed Oct 15, 2008 8:00 am

Because no-one even bothered to reply and no one read it so I got rid of it.
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Wed Oct 15, 2008 5:03 pm

Aw! I never got the chance to read it. If you repost it, I promise at least I'll read it. ^^

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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Wed Oct 15, 2008 6:04 pm

i would of read it..
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Thu Oct 16, 2008 7:45 am

Okay, okay, maybe I'll put it back up.......
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Thu Oct 16, 2008 1:55 pm

YaY
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Sat Oct 18, 2008 12:39 am

It's up! Read it now 'cause I might just delete it again!
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Mon May 04, 2009 2:02 am

...I toldja I'd read. I just didn't specify when! ^^'

Wow. That was beautiful! The descriptions were very nice, and I loved the tiny bit of romance. It was very good, Kip!

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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Mon May 04, 2009 2:26 am

Fanks you!

but now it's so old I'm embarrased by it so I'm deleting it anyway!
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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Mon May 04, 2009 3:34 am

Aw, don't do that! It's really good! I mean, I think your actual writing has gotten better, but this, as a story, is really nice!

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PostSubject: Re: Kippy's weird loopy tale from Lala land!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   Wed May 06, 2009 10:06 am

THanks again! I just realised I can't delete it so it stays!
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