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El
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Registration date : 2007-04-06
 |  Subject: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story)  Fri Apr 13, 2007 7:44 am | |
| Hey guys, this is the first part of my story, My Heart's Cry.
It is rated G, nothing bad in it.
My Heart’s Cry
By Lozza (can't give my real name, sorry)
‘I have to get out of here’ was my first thought as I rolled onto my side in my bed this morning. I had taken a beating from my foster parents for not taking out the garbage when I should have yesterday. The bruises are swelling and are now a dark purple-black, and this is not the first time it has happened.
I am an orphan. My mother died at childbirth and my father died in a car accident. I am being raised by foster parents. I’m 13 years old and I have long, waist length black hair that I wear in a plait. I have blue-grey eyes and a ski-jump nose. My mother named me Sévia. She says it means ‘wise and beautiful’.
I have gotten used to being on my own now, and don’t like people who talk to me.
Today I’m leaving, and no one can stop me. I will go to my grandparents place. It is only 5 kilometers from here, I should make it today.
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I pack my only possessions into a grey and red thread bare back pack. I have a crumpled photo of my mother and father together. They are smiling and happy. Maybe one day I will be like that… I stuff four sets of clothes into my back pack as well as a stale loaf of bread taken from the fridge, a can of tuna and a bottle of water. I pick up furry lump, contemplating whether to take my only friend, my black cat. I called her Sarupa, after my childhood friend. This was before my father died and I had to move away.
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The_Most_crazy_girl121
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Number of posts : 1571
Age : 28
Current Location : The Weirdest Planet in the world
Humor : Um, what is humor? Oh yeah I have tons of it.
Hobbies : Reading books, playing with books, selling books you get the picture.
Registration date : 2007-01-13
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Tue Apr 17, 2007 5:34 pm | |
| I think it is a promsing begining. When theirs more post it. I will be very intrested. | |
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El
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Number of posts : 4606
Registration date : 2007-04-06
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Wed Apr 18, 2007 9:01 am | |
| Cool, thanks. I will write some more tomorrow! | |
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The_Most_crazy_girl121
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Number of posts : 1571
Age : 28
Current Location : The Weirdest Planet in the world
Humor : Um, what is humor? Oh yeah I have tons of it.
Hobbies : Reading books, playing with books, selling books you get the picture.
Registration date : 2007-01-13
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Fri Apr 20, 2007 3:57 pm | |
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El
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Number of posts : 4606
Registration date : 2007-04-06
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Sat Apr 21, 2007 5:59 am | |
| haven't got around to writing more... but anyway... | |
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The_Most_crazy_girl121
Senior Member
Number of posts : 1571
Age : 28
Current Location : The Weirdest Planet in the world
Humor : Um, what is humor? Oh yeah I have tons of it.
Hobbies : Reading books, playing with books, selling books you get the picture.
Registration date : 2007-01-13
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Thu May 10, 2007 5:44 pm | |
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El
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Number of posts : 4606
Registration date : 2007-04-06
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Sat May 12, 2007 1:42 am | |
| ok. Been real busy with ice skating and stuff... | |
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kyrstie
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Age : 28
Current Location : arizona
Humor : 1 brother 2 sisters 3 altogether
Hobbies : GRAVE DIGGER (monster truck)
Registration date : 2007-02-25
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Sat May 12, 2007 4:32 am | |
| wow thats really good when can we read more?? | |
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El
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Number of posts : 4606
Registration date : 2007-04-06
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Tue May 15, 2007 10:50 am | |
| Soon, just wanted to write more, like a chapter before I put it up.
And thanks! | |
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punkrock_bassist
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Number of posts : 4301
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Current Location : not where i want to be
Humor : i'm so uncool, im cool
Hobbies : ...i need one
Registration date : 2007-01-30
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Fri May 25, 2007 12:49 am | |
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El
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Number of posts : 4606
Registration date : 2007-04-06
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Fri May 25, 2007 10:58 am | |
| coolies, thanks  | |
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punkrock_bassist
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Number of posts : 4301
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Current Location : not where i want to be
Humor : i'm so uncool, im cool
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| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Fri May 25, 2007 6:23 pm | |
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El
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Number of posts : 4606
Registration date : 2007-04-06
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Wed Jul 04, 2007 2:16 am | |
| Gosh, I still haven't had time to write more! AAAH! | |
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punkrock_bassist
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Number of posts : 4301
Age : 29
Current Location : not where i want to be
Humor : i'm so uncool, im cool
Hobbies : ...i need one
Registration date : 2007-01-30
| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Sat Jul 07, 2007 9:25 pm | |
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Devil_101
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| | Subject: Re: My Hearts Cry Rated G(First part of my story) Thu Jul 26, 2007 11:42 am | |
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